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[Hêddřa Malvaas]

Patience
 
Breaking
In the darkness of the deep sea,
Inhaling,
Luminous treasures of an unimaginable value.
In the chaos of the ocean of clouds,
Seeking,
Lucid riches of an unseen amount.
In the emptiness of the alluring maze,
Walking,
Glowy chests of a comforting content.
Flying.

 

[Lina]

Hallo @Hêddřa Malvaas,
 
in deinem Text lese ich sehr viel Gefühl, auch wenn mein Schulenglisch nicht ganz reicht um dein Gedicht fließend zu verstehen. Es sind sehr interessanten Gedankengänge, die mich zum Nachdenken gebracht haben.
 
Gerne gelesen!
 
Liebe Grüße
Lina

 

[Carlos]

Hallo Heddra,
 
I like your poem.
Perhaps, according to the title, is it a definition of patience or a saying of what is possible to achieve through it.
You can find light in the darkness of the see, in the chaos of a cloudy sky or, as you say, "in the glowy chests of a comforting content."
That is: in yourself!