Remorse (englisch)

[Starsurfer]

As often as I’m so foolish
I’m backed up by you
I hope to see you soonish
It’s so much you get me through
 
I know you’re a man of reliability
And that’s what I treasure
So I assume liability
For all that I messed up
 
You are my heart and in my soul
So please forgive me being a fool <33

 

[Lily]

Hi Starsurfer,
 
I like the statement of your poem - unfortunately your English is not adequate ...
You could probably rhyme much better in your mother tongue!
 
I tried my hand as follows:
 

Whenever I feel like a fool

I am backed up by you

you always have a tool

by which to get me through
 

I know I can always rely

on you and your goodwill

however, I will try

to meet you up the hill
 

You are my heart, you are my soul

please forgive me for being a fool ​