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[Hase]

The Bridge
 
Sun sets behind the bridge
And with it another day
Loses itself in a colourful sky
 
All one day
Of smiles and tears and hugs
Comes to an end
 
Ducks say Good Night
On the nearby river
That I have walked along since I can think
Biking in summer
Cold hands in autumn
Looking for snow in winter
Greeting the first sunlight and flowers in spring
Now I am standing still
Staring eastward
Ashamed of enjoying life ...
 
Sun has set behind the bridge
If only there always was a bridge
To connect what is separate
 
Pacify what rages

 

[Carlos]

Hallo Hase, 
 
"ashamed of enjoying life ..." 
 
Hier würde ich das Gedicht beenden lassen. 
Liebe Grüße
Carlos